This was surprisingly deep for being short and explicit. :) I liked the way you managed to portray their masked vulnerabilities so cleverly. Poor Illya, with his hand over his eyes. And Napoleon seemed really sympathetic as well, even though he was the one leaving. Lucky for both of them that they end up partners later. ;)
From: Loosha Date: 08/27/2010
Nice little story. I'm putting it into my favourite file. Thanks
From: Eli Date: 09/24/2004
Huh. That was angsty. Like some lovely lady in other site said, this would be unforgivable if we don't already knew what happen later. As things are...you rock, baby!!!
From: Ghostie Date: 07/07/2004
Oh, this was delicious! Bittersweet too, though given the date that the story takes place, there is room for *much* speculation on the future of these two. Yum! I really enjoyed your story!
From: Meris Date: 06/28/2004
Oh, wow! I want to read the rest of the story this bit is part of!
I loved the wealth of detail that made the cold and the feel of the room real. I really liked that they were men together, not just a set of opposites: shorter/taller, younger/older, blond/brunet. The sex was hot, but the foreshadowing was better! I liked the question that Illya asked, "Do the women know about it?" because it suddenly showed a million other stories in a new light. I really liked how the story showed another side of Napoleon's life and motivations and thinking. I really liked that Illya wasn't depicted as a needy naive, but a competent, independent person, whose paucity of dates is his own conscious choice.
The punch of this story is tremendous for its length. I wish I could write as well as you do. I'm practicing, but when I do, you'll have moved to another level, so there will always be something to aspire to.